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scarlet artist

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Scarlet artists paints a picture
To see if she still feels you
Through these veins this paint beats quick
But the paint will never heal you

Scarlet artist tells no lies
She's okay and you believe her
Planning her next masterpiece
Waiting until you leave her

Artist swears she doesn't care
But I think she cares too much
Maybe she will feel again
With a bit of blood in luck

Little scarlet artist
Will you paint a picture now?
Razor blades and broken hearts
All that practice you know how

This is all your fault, you know
She can't feel you there
Paintbrush in the bathroom
How deep a cut will she dare?

The end of the poem, dear reader.
Subtle and final plot twist
Our little scarlet artists
slides her paintbrush down her wrists

Red paint out across the floor
Embrace her last design
The tick tock clock screams seconds
Till artist is out of time

Scarlet artist paints no more
And now she can not feel you
Silver streaks from long dried tears
In dead eyes that will never see you
sorry....????

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:star::star::star::star: Overall
:star::star::star::star::star: Vision
:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Originality
:star::star::star-half::star-empty::star-empty: Technique
:star::star::star::star::star: Impact

First line "Scarlet artists paints" you mistyped the word agreement. But that's okay, I knew what you meant.

I really liked this poem and the story of it is great, the naratting seems as a distant on looker helpless at what's to come, which is a little predictable but in all good.

I also really liked the flow of the piece. Some things I didn't like was how you called her 'scarlet artist'. It was very creative but sometimes confusing and didn't help the flow. In all I really liked this though and it has a pretty good far away reflective look at what bad choices can result in. Good job :]